Tuesday, February 18, 2014

Final Blogging Assessment

Original Blog Post:
Tris followed Four and found out he was going to do a simulation. This is a fear simulation and Tris goes in with him and discovers Four's fears and helps him get through his four fears which is why they call him Four. In the last fear Tris learns his real name is Tobias because Marcus appears and she recognizes him and knew he had a son who transferred to Dauntless and realizes Four is Tobias. Tris and Four go on a walk and talk about his aptitude test results and she finds out that he got Abnegation which is where he's from but chose Dauntless to get away from his father and won't become a Dauntless leader so he doesn't have to see his dad who is a Abnegation leader. Then Tobias admits he likes Tris and has been watching her and taking care of her throughout her time at Dauntless and then they kiss. This is significant because they used to not like each other that much and were thought to have completely opposite personalities but now they have gotten to know each other are very alike and meant for each other.
The next day they have to take another fear simulation but this time from one of the instructor's and it's Lauren. When Tris goes she has to deal with a kidnapping and she fails it and it becomes one of her fears. When it's over Tobias comes to her and yells at her "Get yourself together! This is pathetic" (Roth 345) and then Tris snaps at him and slaps him and yells at him to shut up, and as this happens everyone sits there in stunned silence watching this fold out. Later Tris hops on a train without supervision and goes to Erudite where she hopes to find her brother Caleb. She finds him in a library and then they talk and Caleb is completely changed. He's nervous, confused, and doesn't know who or what to believe. Then two men come and take Tris away to Jeanine who was the Erudite leader spreading rules about Abnegation and they have a talk about her missing aptitude results and why she chose Dauntless because Tris thinks Jeanine is one of the people that hate Divergent and are out to get them. Then her guard sends Tris back to Dauntless where Eric is waiting for her...

1. What specific words/phrases demonstrate your writer's voice? How do these words/phrases showcase your personality as a writer?
Some specific phrases that help demonstrate my voice are when I wrote "and then they kiss" because I didn't have to mention that but I believed it was a significant point in the book because in the end they fall in love and together they stop the war that Erudite started, and also it's an awkward relationship because he is her leader in the initiation process. Another phrase could be when I'm talking about after Tris failed her fear simulation and gets in a fight with Tobias about it. This demonstrates my voice because I like to describe exactly what I see happening and not leaving out the less important details that aren't completely irrelevant. These phrases showcase my personality as a writer because I like to include as much information as I can because it makes whatever I am writing more factual. Also I believe they showcase my personality because I like the intense and action parts of books because I'm not usually someone who sits down and reads for a while but I will if it has action in it like the endings usually, which I did for this book. 

2. What purposeful diction and syntax choices did you make to enhance your writer’s voice? You must choose to discuss at least one diction and one syntax technique from the list below. Make sure to include textual evidence from your post where you included the diction and syntax choices you discuss.
Purposeful diction I use is when I say "He's nervous, confused, and doesn't know who or what to believe." This is purposeful because I am describing how Caleb is feeling and these describe exactly what I would be feeling as well in the same situation. Purposeful syntax I use is when I end the post saying "Then her guard sends Tris back to Dauntless where Eric is waiting for her..." This is purposeful because it shows that I'm leaving the reader in an anxious state because they want to know what happens next and I do that by ending with the triple dots. Also throughout my post the sentence lengths are short and straight to the point which is what you want in a blog post.

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